ext_193835 ([identity profile] arch-duke.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] salmon_pink 2007-05-13 09:08 pm (UTC)

guhhhhh.



Love the way you incorporated Usopp's boasting. He's brought thousands of men to their knees with passion, and then promptly taken their gold. He's rich, you know. So rich he doesn't even need to reduce said men to quivering lumps of desire, but he does anyway because he's the great Captain Usopp!

Luffy's ... wow. I love how you can make Luffy have a genuine sexual side even while remaining his silly, idiotic self. And that look in his eyes? The one reserved for battle? I can imagine that happening, his intent, and wowie.

Nami always knows what she wants, and especially from Sanji, doesn't she? Even if he's the one getting all the pleasure, she happens to get some, too. I bet seeing men and women weak in the knees for her/because of her is enough payment x>

Zoro's. .... guhhghghhhdhafkjhjfhfafh.
There’s no technique there, just Zoro’s complete lack of a gag reflex, and white hot suction all around him, everywhere.
Beautiful. And even on the giving end Zoro's still a relentless, unforgiving cocky bastard, rubbing Sanji's nose in it for lack of a better description.

I'm feeling strangely descriptive right now, so like, the way you write everyone is extremely, eerily in character and I love it. Unlike alot of fanfiction authors, you. Keep. Me. Coming. Back. For. More. D: ♥

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